Monday, October 14, 2013

Day at White sunday

This morning we had 40 minutes to write about anything we wanted. From this we are going to set our writing goals for the term. Here is what I wrote.

White Sunday was the best fun I have had out of my whole holidays. I went with my aunties and brothers to the church. We got to the church and already there were lots of people there we almost got mistaken to be kids performing in the event. Luckily our aunty did not know where we were so she checked in the waiting room for the performers and there we were sitting. we were walking to our seats when we bumped into my other aunt.

We got to the front row seats and were waiting for the event to start by the time it started I was really hungry. It was 8:47 and the singing and plays commenced at 9:00 it was also funny because everyone was quiet and only the piano was playing. Then all you could here was “BONG” the white Sunday event was ready to start. All the families were cheering and yelling it was really cool how they could encourage other peoples kids.

I was there for my three cousins Raewen, Rowana and Kruz they were in lots of the church groups. I was surprised that how many groups they were in, it was shocking actually I was proud of them. I loved the little kids they had a Gangnam style at the end of their dance it was cute some of them did the wrong actions or were facing the wrong way. It was very really cute.

1 comment:

Mr. Hutchings said...

Hey Silas,

Sounds like your white sunday went really well. Your cousins sound like they're very accomplished :)

What goals do you think you could set from this piece of writing? I think you've done well overall but have some finer details to look at, keep on track with your punctuation and capitals and making sure your scentences flow well :)

Keep it up and good luck woth your goals,

Mr. Hutchings.